Amanda

Feb 25, 2013 By Miradeaux, 12

Courtesy Tate Museum

The cold wind bit into Amanda’s skin, and she shivered. She sat under a large tree, hidden by its shadow. Her teeth chattered in fear. She rubbed her arms, trying to warm herself up.

“Amanda!” A voice called from several yards away, loud and clear. Amanda held her breath. The voice went higher at the end of the word, making it sound almost cheerful. The voice was deep, but you could tell it was a woman.

“Amanda!” The voice was closer now. Amanda wanted to get up and run, but her feet felt frozen to the ground. She could not move. Fear paralyzed her.

“Amanda!” The woman was definitely getting closer. Amanda’s breaths were shaky and loud. Her mouth was too dry to swallow. Her bones scratched her skin.

“Amaaaandaaa!” The woman giggled loudly. Tears leaked out of Amanda’s eyes, first slowly, but then quickly. She could not stop them. She was afraid. She did not want to die. She did not want to die so soon.

“Amanda!” The voice was quieter, and more sorrowful now. Amanda closed her eyes and whispered a final goodbye to her dog, Buster. I’m so sorry, Buster, she mouthed, I love you so much. Please, please, I love you.

“Oh, Amanda?” The woman was so close now, she didn’t need to shout any longer. Amanda could not see anything, it was so dark. She felt numb. She felt like her body was being lifted up. Was she dead? Was she alive? She saw her grandmother. “I missed you,” she said.

“Oh, dear, Amanda,” the voice said, but now it was her grandmother’s voice. “Dear, dear Amanda. Why don’t you come home?”

Amanda shut her eyes.

She let the cold take over.

 
Alena Gripper   10 weeks ago

That story gave me gossebumps

Cecil   10 weeks ago

Good story!

tabah   10 weeks ago

Your story is fantastic,keep it up.

DJrockid   10 weeks ago

So cool!

Mia1789   10 weeks ago

Great story!

loveandwisdom   11 weeks ago

oh it so.. i don't know, it gives me chills down my spine!

Kittycat   11 weeks ago

What inspired you to write this? it's great!

Tressa   11 weeks ago

Your an amazing writer, Miradeaux! Amazing stroy!!!
I love how you just ended it letting people wonder what happened!!

writergirl   11 weeks ago

so what really happened to Amanda? can you explain?

brookep   11 weeks ago

You should have made it a little longer so that we could find out what happened to her. i wish there was a 2nd part because i am very interested. i want to find out what took her. was it the devil. was it death. I NEED TO KNOW.

charlotte1   10 weeks ago

Definitely!

Editor   11 weeks ago

brookep : Actually, this is an interesting style of writing that leaves the imagination to the mind of the reader. The recent movie "Life of Pi" is one such kind -- at the end, it raises questions and leaves readers wondering! 

When we are younger, we read stories that are complete with a happy (or sad) ending. But as you grow older, you will find books more thought-provoking.

You do ask interesting questions :) What do other Youngziners think? 

RO   2 weeks ago

i watched the life of pi in a theater once. it was 3D!

Tryn28   11 weeks ago

is there a second part to this? the ending will give me a bad dream!

RO   2 weeks ago

me too!

FuzzUzzle   11 weeks ago

No, there's no second part :) Sorry if I made it too disturbing!

Tryn28   11 weeks ago

totally okay. i think your story is really descriptive:]

Ella   11 weeks ago

So dramatic!

supernova   11 weeks ago

Oh my goodness. Just fantastic.

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